The universe of New Eden is vast and boundless, with stars as numerous as the grains of sand on a beach. This is humanity’s second home, where the territories of the Four Empires intersect, and countless star systems and star fields form a complex and perilous world. At the edge of this starry sea lies the Abyss, a rift shrouded in darkness, hiding endless secrets and dangers.Captain Gou Jiu stood on the bridge of the “Revenge,” gazing through the viewport at the endless darkness ahead. His face was etched with the marks of time, yet his eyes were filled with determination and resilience. Gou Jiu was once an ordinary miner, living in a small star field on the edge of New Eden—Yuan’an Star Field. However, a sudden disaster changed his fate. His home was destroyed by a mysterious force, and his family and friends disappeared in an instant. Gou Jiu narrowly escaped and embarked on a path of vengeance.Yuan’an Star Field had been a peaceful place where Gou Jiu spent the first half of his life. His daily routine involved piloting his mining ship, shuttling between various mining points in the star field to extract rare mineral resources. Gou Jiu’s life was simple and regular until that dark night descended. It was a quiet evening when Gou Jiu had just finished a day’s work and was preparing to return to base. Suddenly, a violent tremor spread across the entire star field, followed by countless warships emerging from the darkness. Their firepower rained down like a storm, turning the entire Yuan’an Star Field into a sea of fire. Gou Jiu’s home was destroyed in an instant, and his family and friends vanished amidst the chaos.Gou Jiu narrowly escaped the disaster, piloting a dilapidated escape pod through the chaotic battlefield and eventually arriving at the edge of New Eden. There, he met Feng Tai and Rong Yao, two others who had also lost their homes in the disaster. They decided to join forces and seek an opportunity for revenge. Gou Jiu knew he could not face the forces that destroyed his home alone. He needed a powerful ship, a reliable team, and a heart that would never give up.The “Revenge” is a Doomsday-class battleship, once belonging to a powerful pirate fleet. Gou Jiu captured the ship by chance and spent a great deal of time and resources modifying and upgrading it. Now, the “Revenge” boasts formidable firepower and robust defenses. Its high slots are equipped with six heavy energy cannons, each capable of dealing thousands of points of damage with a range that extends tens of kilometers. The mid slots are fitted with multiple shield extenders and energy rechargers, ensuring sustained combat capability. The low slots are installed with thrusters and inertial stabilizers, making its maneuverability on par with that of a frigate.Captain Gou Jiu stood in the center of the bridge, his gaze sweeping across the entire bridge. His first mate, Feng Tai, was intently operating the control panel, his fingers dancing swiftly over the keyboard, occasionally glancing up to report the latest situation to Gou Jiu. Feng Tai was a man who knew no fear in battle. His voice was loud, yet his operation of the ship was remarkably calm. Gou Jiu knew that Feng Tai was one of his most reliable partners, and his presence ensured that the “Revenge” remained stable amidst the complexities of combat.To Gou Jiu’s left, the combat commander, Rong Yao, was fully focused on the tactical screen. Her fingers lightly glided over the control panel as the electronic warfare system sprang to life at her command. Rong Yao was a woman with exceptional tactical acumen. Her operations were precise and swift, making her an indispensable asset to the “Revenge” in battle. Gou Jiu knew that Rong Yao’s electronic warfare skills could provide them with unexpected advantages at critical moments.“Captain, we’re ready for the jump,” Feng Tai’s voice broke the silence, tinged with tension but more so with determination.Gou Jiu nodded, turning his gaze back to the viewport. The edge of the Abyss was a chaotic nebula, with countless asteroids and debris floating within, like scars on the face of the universe. This was one of the most dangerous places in New Eden, where countless explorers had met their end, and the forces lurking in the darkness were even more chilling. Gou Jiu knew that they were about to step into a world filled with unknowns and dangers, but they had no other choice. Gou Jiu’s home had been destroyed, his family and friends had vanished in the disaster, and he had to find the forces behind it, uncover the truth, and avenge his home.Gou Jiu took a deep breath, his voice echoing through the bridge: “Attention all hands, prepare for the jump. Our destination is the edge of the Abyss, the Yuan’an Star Field.”“Understood, Captain,” Feng Tai swiftly operated the control panel, the jump engine began to activate, and the countdown started to flash on the bridge’s screen.Gou Jiu’s gaze once again fell on the viewport, his heart filled with a mix of complex emotions. He felt both awe and hatred for this starry sea. It had taken away his home, his family, but he would not give up. Gou Jiu knew that he had to uncover the darkness of the Abyss, find the forces hidden behind it, and avenge his home.With the roar of the jump engine, the “Revenge” vanished into the void, leaving behind a trail of distorted light. Gou Jiu stood on the bridge, his gaze resolute, with only one goal in mind—unveiling the darkness of the Abyss and finding the truth.
Some grammar by example:
The universe of New Eden is vast and boundless, with stars as numerous as the grains of sand on a beach. This is humanity’s second home, where the territories of the Four Empires intersect, and countless star systems and star fields form a complex and perilous world. At the edge of this starry sea lies the Abyss, a rift shrouded in darkness, hiding endless secrets and dangers.
Captain Gou Jiu stood on the bridge of the Revenge gazing through the viewport at the endless darkness ahead. His face was etched with the marks of time, yet his eyes were filled with determination and resilience.
Gou Jiu was once an ordinary miner, living in a small star field on the edge of New Eden—Yuan’an Star Field. However, a sudden disaster changed his fate. His home was destroyed by a mysterious force, and his family and friends disappeared in an instant. Gou Jiu narrowly escaped and embarked on a path of vengeance.
Yuan’an Star Field had been a peaceful place where Gou Jiu spent the first half of his life. His daily routine involved piloting his mining ship, shuttling between various mining points in the star field to extract rare mineral resources. Gou Jiu’s life was simple and regular until that dark night descended. It was a quiet evening when Gou Jiu had just finished a day’s work and was preparing to return to base.
Suddenly, a violent tremor spread across the entire star field, followed by countless warships emerging from the darkness. Their firepower rained down like a storm, turning the entire Yuan’an Star Field into a sea of fire. Gou Jiu’s home was destroyed in an instant, and his family and friends vanished amidst the chaos. Gou Jiu narrowly escaped the disaster, piloting a dilapidated escape pod through the chaotic battlefield and eventually arriving at the edge of New Eden. There, he met Feng Tai and Rong Yao, two others who had also lost their homes in the disaster. They decided to join forces and seek an opportunity for revenge.
Gou Jiu knew he could not face the forces that destroyed his home alone. He needed a powerful ship, a reliable team, and a heart that would never give up.
The Revenge is a Doomsday-class battleship, once belonging to a powerful pirate fleet. Gou Jiu captured the ship by chance and spent a great deal of time and resources modifying and upgrading it. Now, the Revenge boasts formidable firepower and robust defenses. Its high slots are equipped with six heavy energy cannons, each capable of dealing thousands of points of damage with a range that extends tens of kilometers. The mid slots are fitted with multiple shield extenders and energy rechargers, ensuring sustained combat capability. The low slots are installed with thrusters and inertial stabilizers, making its maneuverability on par with that of a frigate.
Captain Gou Jiu stood in the center of the bridge, his gaze sweeping across the entire bridge. His first mate, Feng Tai, was intently operating the control panel, his fingers dancing swiftly over the keyboard, occasionally glancing up to report the latest situation to Gou Jiu. Feng Tai was a man who knew no fear in battle. His voice was loud, yet his operation of the ship was remarkably calm. Gou Jiu knew that Feng Tai was one of his most reliable partners, and his presence ensured that the Revenge remained stable amidst the complexities of combat.
To Gou Jiu’s left, the combat commander, Rong Yao, was fully focused on the tactical screen. Her fingers lightly glided over the control panel as the electronic warfare system sprang to life at her command. Rong Yao was a woman with exceptional tactical acumen. Her operations were precise and swift, making her an indispensable asset to the Revenge in battle. Gou Jiu knew that Rong Yao’s electronic warfare skills could provide them with unexpected advantages at critical moments.
“Captain, we’re ready for the jump.” Feng Tai’s voice broke the silence, tinged with tension but more so with determination.
Gou Jiu nodded, turning his gaze back to the viewport. The edge of the Abyss was a chaotic nebula, with countless asteroids and debris floating within, like scars on the face of the universe. This was one of the most dangerous places in New Eden, where countless explorers had met their end, and the forces lurking in the darkness were even more chilling. Gou Jiu knew that they were about to step into a world filled with unknowns and dangers, but they had no other choice. Gou Jiu’s home had been destroyed, his family and friends had vanished in the disaster, and he had to find the forces behind it, uncover the truth, and avenge his home.
Gou Jiu took a deep breath, his voice echoing through the bridge, “Attention all hands, prepare for the jump. Our destination is the edge of the Abyss, the Yuan’an Star Field.”
“Understood, Captain.” Feng Tai swiftly operated the control panel, the jump engine began to activate, and the countdown started to flash on the bridge’s screen.
Gou Jiu’s gaze once again fell on the viewport, his heart filled with a mix of complex emotions. He felt both awe and hatred for this starry sea. It had taken away his home, his family, but he would not give up. Gou Jiu knew that he had to uncover the darkness of the Abyss, find the forces hidden behind it, and avenge his home.
With the roar of the jump engine, the Revenge vanished into the void, leaving behind a trail of distorted light. Gou Jiu stood on the bridge, his gaze resolute, with only one goal in mind—unveiling the darkness of the Abyss and finding the truth.
Thank you very much. I originally wanted to post it on the Chinese APP Tomato Novel Network, but it was rejected due to copyright reasons (ccp), so I posted it on the forum. My English is very poor, so I used machine translation directly.
You’re welcome. English grammar is often complicated and obtuse. That’s why I thought an example would be more helpful than a list of rules. Good luck, and keep writing!