You pretty much nailed it: Iâm very character driven. I get wrapped up in what has shaped them into the people that make the choices they do, face the events of narrative in the way that they do. Short fiction presents both opportunities and limitations when it comes to character development, but thatâs also dependent on what your goals are as an author. It may not serve the story to have the kind of character thatâs easy to identify - sometimes the opposite is true.
Just to indulge for a moment, thinking on Allak from Death for Glory, I interpret him as someone who was able to transmute cynicism through egotism, seeing his choices reverberating through the future of his family and faith. A founder of sorts. His plan is predicated at first on risking his life for money, selling his expertise in an extremely high-stakes situation. How does he respond in the moment when his plan seems destined to fail?
Iâm thinking of the passage:
âI need all reps here, I need all reps here! Orbit! Orbit!â Melinda calls. They are blitzing us⌠âKill the Oracle! Kill the Oracle! Quick, quick, quick!â
They are trading everything for the BarghâŚ
A few heartbeats later I feel the violent rumble of missile impacts and blaster rounds ripping apart the armor of the ship. My teeth rattle in my jaw as the ship thunders to the pounding of enemy ordinance.
Panic grips my chest. My face feels flushâ it canât be. The shields are gone already?
Allakâs experience of panic and his response to it could be a pivotal moment, if not for the plot then for the reader to identify more deeply the sort of person he might be. How would this passage feel if we read how it affects Allak as paralyzed by dread? How would it feel if we read Allak as wrestling with fear and exercising clinical discipline at a crucial moment? What would the difference convey, even though the scene plays out the exact same way?
Itâs the experience of embodied terror that show us Allakâs real vulnerability (one we understand deeply), but his experience of and response to that moment that reveal what sets him apart, make him the central figure of this story. Perhaps in first person this has the greatest impact, since there is no other perspective to provide narrative detail. But as I mentioned, Allak already makes sense.
All of this is meant to speculate in a general sense, and it is merely a measure of personal preference for me as a reader. Again, depending on the story you want to tell and how you wish to reveal (or conceal) the characterâs inner workings, these points may not have a great deal of value.