Walking in Myth

[Mizhara_Del_thul]

Story Link: Walking in Myth
Length: Over eight thousand words, not forum friendly.
Subject: A capsuleer walks the streets of a city at war.
Location: Floseswin, unnamed City.
Accessibility: OOC for now, IC when Floseswin arc finishes or cities are obliterated.

Feedback very much appreciated. Feel free to post criticism or just general feelings on the story here or elsewhere you can find me.

I originally wrote this almost a month ago, but as my ISP has decided to proper screw me for a while now, and I won’t get a new provider installed until next month, I’ve been stuck on the phone only for internet access, which has left a lot of writing in limbo. Seeing Floseswin get more action in the news though, means I had to find a solution. With an external HDD, a work computer and being a bit naughty on said workstation, I’ve now gotten this one posted.

Please enjoy.

Edit: And apparently we have cakedays here. Welp.

[Hexelen]

@Mizhara_Del_thul

Feedback very much appreciated.

Personal feelings here; thematically, I get a strong Altered Carbon vibe from this one. To me, this is a good thing.

Style comment; in the early paragraphs, it seemed that the descriptive/narrative passages might be served being broken into smaller chunks, if it wouldn’t ruin the cadence that you were trying to achieve. That is also a preference thing, so grain of salt and all that.

First-person, always a bold choice in my opinion. Highly immersive in this case, not overly descriptive except, perhaps, in very rare cases. There were times that the speaker shifts from inner monologue to “direct” the reader, which seemed intentional.

Looking forward to the next one. o7

[Temba_Mapindazi]

Quite an interesting point of view. Getting dirtside an out of the pod is something capsuleers need to normalize. Thanks for sharing.

[Mizhara_Del_thul]

Galactic Hour News Roundup: Liberation Day YC122 Edition - EVE Community

The war has come to the City. The myth is shattering.

@World News

Reports from Jolan Kraal indicate a major uprising took place last night with heavy fighting taking place around key infrastructure. Forces under the command of the Khanid warlord Alar Chakaid were evidently unable to maintain control of the city’s shield generators as the defenses fell later this morning. The SFIVA’s 2nd Army Group subsequently broke through and, although confused reports indicate continuing Amarr resistance, the liberation of Jolan Kraal is certain.

At Port Kul, House Sarum forces under Colonel General Vikhtor Mazari appear to have taken the decision to evacuate amidst a major uprising in that city and shortly after the situation in Jolan Kraal became clearly untenable. Reports indicate that House Sarum forces and allies from House Ardishapur used Redeemer-class battleships to establish an evacuation jump link to Arzad while Port Kul’s orbital defense batteries provided covering fire. An unknown number of troops and support personnel were evacuated before Port Kul’s defense batteries were destroyed by Brutor Vanguard Skalmöld -variant planetary assault dreadnoughts.

Large numbers of House Sarum troops remain in Port Kul and General Mazari is reported to be directing the rearguard action. The status of Duke Alar Chakaid is unknown at this time. Hetman General Kanth Filmir has broadcast a general communique calling on all Amarr forces to surrender or face certain death at the hands of the combined SFIVA/Resistance forces.

The situation on Floseswin IV has been keenly followed by Minmatar capsuleers, with their repeated efforts to support the SFIVA and resistance cited by both Sanmatar Shakor and General Filmir. As well as visiting parade formations of Republic Fleet ships throughout key Minmatar systems, Minmatar capsuleers will be marking the Liberation Day celebrations with their own Tribal Tournament events in the Dal system.

How much impact does a capsuleer and her network have in a city rising up against the invaders? Who knows. Maybe none at all. The important thing is taking the stand, and putting it all on the line. Let’s see if the remaining Amarr have the strength and courage to blow the generators.