Warning: Flood of replies incoming. I’ve been doing a lore walk, and I’ve been finding some assorted errors and vagueness. Need to go back through my history and dig up the pages I was on yesterday.
The Elder War has several grey pronoun issues–as in, the use of pronouns makes it unclear who exactly is being referred to. It happens throughout, but this is the biggest offender:
[…] It was Sammar’s cousin Brecin that led the revolt that took place in 22486 and he who also convinced Sammar’s eldest son to join him. After storming a meeting between the entourages of Utulf and an Amarr delegate, sparing few, Brecin took the delegate’s son hostage. He then retrieved a black dagger that he had constructed for the event and then proceeded to slit the throats of both the Amarr heir and the surprised son of Sammar in front of both their fathers. This act came to be replicated often throughout the Vindication Wars, as modern weapons were put aside in favour of increasingly ornate black daggers and bloody, theatrical violence against Ammatar. Sammar was spared on this occasion, and distraught, he indicated to the Elders his desire to reveal the deception of the Nefantar, so that such an act would never be repeated. He was found dead the next day, after an apparent suicide.
Only a year later an Ammatar military contact had a facility under his charge obliterated in an explosion that claimed many lives and left him scarred. Soon after he returned to work he arranged for the Nefantar Elder to visit him and ended up being seen by the Thukker Elder as well. […]
Pulling the pronoun through to the next paragraph, it makes it look like the facility belonged to Sammar, because he is the last character named. But also he is remarked as having been found dead right before that.
(Don’t hate me! I’m an editor. D: )